Using my sences to describe an object

Kia Ora Blogging world,

I have created a screencastify of me reading my writing, I have described an orange using my 5 scenes, smell, taste, feel, touch, and hear. Does my writing make sense, is it detailed enough for you to imagine what I am writing. If something does not seem right, please give me feedback.

Thank you,
Sincerely, Gargee

Screencastify of me reading my work

What I have learned in reading today

Kia Ora everyone,

Today in reading I have learned an astonishing fact while I was reading an article! In Hong Kong the KFC crew have created a nail polish that you can actually eat!

There are 2 types of nail polish that you can eat, there is Hot & Spicy and Original recipe that on the front bottle has the slogan "finger liken good". But unfortunately the nail polish has to stay in your refrigerator and can only last for about 5 days. Do you want to try out this nail polish right now?

Hope you enjoy!

Sincerely, Gargee